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  • Lyric Poetry Re: Raindrops

    Nice piece there.Parts of the imagery used resembled a movie scene. I smile again at the raindrops now, Watching them lash against the window. They seem so happy. Probably another ...

    Jul 13, 2009
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Tick Tock

    Great work there.You brought out the emotions very well. The poem has a great effect. Keep up the good work!

    Jul 13, 2009
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Shiver

    Shiver It came back to haunt me yet again When I saw the corpse beside the sad family. This is going to happen to me one day. I’ll just fade ...

    Jul 13, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: 2 sides of 1 story

    Nice poem there.But you still have great scope for improvement I fight for my country I fight for my happiness I love my country and my family I love my ...

    Jul 13, 2009
  • Poetry Discussion Re: Exceptional Poetry Nominations

    i nominate this one.Its called "Red Cup Wishes" by Jon.

    Jul 12, 2009
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Psychopath

    The craziness and distraction of the psychopath's mind is great.The stone hearted description is completely correct.There were however some things that need attention: A little more description of the

    Jul 12, 2009
  • Other Poetry Re: The Mask

    Terrified by our true identity, We change what we are in reality. Living up to people’s expectation, disguising ourselves in falsification. This act we put up day by day, Our ...

    Jul 12, 2009
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Fireflies

    Great work there.However it did have places on which improvement was possible Some more information should be given about the narrator and the friend and, the time they spent togethter. ...

    Jul 12, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Milk & Cream

    Amazingly deep poem there! The way you brought out the woman's suppression by her lover and how uncaring the guys was,was thought evoking.Towards the end the reader just cant help ...

    Jul 12, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Lonely Grey Room

    Great poem there.Your poem gives a different meaning of grey. I liked all the possibilities you explored about the room without making the words "grey room" monotonous. Great portrayal of ...

    Jul 12, 2009
  • Questions and Answers Re: Ask a question here (or start a new topic!)

    How do you get that donate option below your points?

    Jul 11, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Jump

    Hey...amazing poem that diverts towards the end reminds me of a similar poem on this site some writer wrote about a basketball. Really humorous!

    Jul 11, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Red Cup Wishes

    Great portrayal of how youth can live in painful wishful thinking(the way i saw the poem). Great use of the cup and the drink.The end especially was really great when ...

    Jul 11, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: The Boy Who Cried Wolf

    Your poem had amazing construction of words and the characters were intricately described. Great detail has been given to the character of the liar and how his bad habit devours ...

    Jul 11, 2009
  • Narrative Poetry Re: The Boy Who Cried Wolf

    Amazing construction of sentences.I loved the way the poem unfolds. Great portrayal of the liar's ability and how his habit devoured him. A little long,but overall.....excellent work!

    Jul 11, 2009


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